Originally Posted By: rray This post was automatically imported from our archived forum.
Hey, Vince.
I don't provide much help to non-members; just a personal decision of mine. However, I'm going to make a small exception here for you.
I visited your web site and here's what I found:
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A home inspection is perhaps the most important chapter in the process of buying a home. Allow StepByStep to be a part of that process. Following your inspection you will be provide with a step by step easy to understand report covering the essential areas of your home.
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The text, I think, is good. However, your web site is like a r?sum?. It must be grammatically correct and there must not be any typographical errors. You must realize that if you have typos and errors on your web site, the person brousing your site is going to wonder what kind of errors are inherent as part of your home inspection and your report.
Here's how I would change that text:
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A home inspection is, perhaps, the most important chapter in the process of buying a home. Allow StepByStep to be a part of that process. Following your inspection, you will be provided with a StepByStep, easy-to-understand report covering the essential areas of your home.
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Note the use of commas, compound hyphens, and the correction of "provide" to "provided."
I'd be happy to help more once you join NACHI; yes, it's a bribe. But it's a bribe that I believe will pay for itself for you. There are lots of tips and benefits in the Members Only area of NACHI. Hope to see you soon over there.
